Kelemvor

Kelemvor is also known as the Lord of the Dead, Judge of the Damned and Master of the Crystal Spire.

Kelemvor was once a mortal along with Cyric and Midnight(Mystra). He inherited the death portfolio when Cyric lost it after his trial by the gods. The first act he performed as god was to tranform Cyrics tower of bone into a gleaming tower of cyrstal. It was to be a symbol that this god of the dead would hide nothing from his subjects. He intends to impart justice among the dead in an even-handed and fair manner.

As Kelemvor and Mystra(Midnight) were lovers in their mortal life it has brought about an unusual alliance. As to if they are lovers in their godly life this is matter they have managed to keep private.

Kelemvors foe is Cyric, who views Kelemvor as someone who maliciously and willfully set out to steal the portfolio of death from him. A tradtional foe of the god of death has been Lathander but he has not declared himself an enemy of Kelemvor. He waits to see if Kelemvor will live up to his promises.

His ally is Mystra.

Change propotions

1. The change of the bastard sword to the scythe.
2. Portefolio is still death, but the death domain is kind of out of the question for any kelemvorian worshipper since in has spells that would create undead. It simply makes no sense for this hater-of-undead god to have such spells on his most central domain spell list. Instead I'll like to use the repose domain and call it death (because.. well.. Kelemvor is the god of death after all).
3. I suggest that only the really keen worshippers of any god goes to their appropriate gods after death, when their god requests this. The rest of the soals are "judged" to an existence in a place that corresponds to their behaviour in life. That is, murderous and thiving people go to a place when murder and theft are commonplace while traditionalists go to a place that never changes and so forth. (An alternative is to let the souls go to places according to their belief; which essential means that people who believe in incarnation will indeed be incarnated, people who think some god will accept them on their plane has the right to go to that plane. Souls who dont believe in anything ends up in some kind of void or are destroyed all together).
   I think this is more in agreement with the old religions, for instance the norse religion where only strong warriors who fell in combat are claimed by the gods and sent to Valhalla. The rest goes to a place "Hel" where they life in relative missery. Hades work approximatly the same way. But neither Hel nor Hades was govened by a lawful, neutral god but an evil god. So the missery and agony would have to depend fairly on what the souls did when they were in a living body.
4. There are no "Wall of Souls" for the unbelievers (a place of ethernal agony). In your world, where people kill clerics for using divine magic (which in essence come from their god) such a wall would propably not be something anyone believes in. And I'd rather my cleric does not have to preach about such matters. He is after all, not a cleric of faith, but of death. Unbelievers, like everyone else, ends up where they belong according to their actions in life. (Or if you rather want that, according to their own belief).
5. You never mentioned anything about Bolin's rather unique ability to turn his property black. Do you allow this? How is it done? Automaticly and over time or through a ceremony?